Midwinter Lovers, Poem |
 Jan 25 2009, 06:35 PM
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 Farewell, Hello. I'm Colleen.  Group: Official Designer Posts: 222 Joined: Jun 2007 Member No: 539,346  |
I submitted this to the writer's block contest. I don't write much poetry, but I saw the contest and suddenly became inspired, haha.
Tell me what you think...  Midwinter Lovers The boughs above have hands to hold Our path is worn, our feet grow cold We're synchronized, our steps, our hearts Forever youthful neath the stars A friend or foe, I cannot say The moon is bright, the branches sway Unearthly lights, a distant glow Illuminating fallen snow A racing mind, a frigid touch Our bodies shake, consumed by lust Hearing words, so long unspoken Pious whispers, mouth unopened The bridges burn, above, below An ember world, turns neath the snow My lips, they part, words will not come We stop, we stare, the cold has won |
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Jan 29 2009, 02:24 AM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
For not writing too much you've done a pretty outstanding job.
"Hearing words, so long unspoken Pious whispers, mouth unopened" This line I don't really understand. Maybe explain? And the ending? Very nice and it fits very well into what you were writing. You should write more :D |
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CrotchetTheLeper Midwinter Lovers Jan 25 2009, 06:35 PM
CrotchetTheLeper Well the poem is essentially about two lovers who ... Jan 29 2009, 09:25 PM wintermelody here's a poem i wrote a while back...
Thump, ... Feb 5 2009, 09:54 PM karmakiller ^ You should really make your topic for your poems... Feb 5 2009, 10:47 PM CrotchetTheLeper I rearranged it and changed it a bit, and this is ... Feb 7 2009, 09:16 PM
JosephCohen123 I entered the writers block competition but i didn... Feb 7 2009, 09:43 PM |
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