Storm, short poem |
Storm, short poem |
May 13 2008, 07:53 PM
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So I just sat down today and wrote this quick. Just kinda flowed. Let me know what you think I guess.
Rain falls and I hear the thunder Lightning strikes and it makes me wonder How long can this downpour last? Can we clear up the mess just as fast? Downpour on my heart, oh rain After this i wont be the same To see you, lightning strikes in my heart I see you and i know rain will start. Do you see the lightning strike? I hear the thunder, oh how they're alike They both begin when i see you And the rain on this pale face is nothing new. |
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doiink ooh I liked that. The rhyme didn't seem forced... May 13 2008, 09:44 PM
karmakiller I like it. Did you intentionally make the last wor... May 13 2008, 10:19 PM
superstitious Sad :[
I like that you stuck with weather eleme... May 14 2008, 05:52 PM![]() ![]() |