Poems...by er..me, don't laugh because god didnt love me |
 Jun 21 2004, 06:19 PM
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 I know who you did last night  Group: Member Posts: 27 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 23,988  |
Bleeding From the inside
Inside I'm bleeding Inside im dying I'm shutting down and im sick of trying these bloody tears full of all my fears disappear You locked me in a tiny box and stabbed me with the key Why do you confuse my smile with happiness? I'm drowning in darkness Just let me bleed from the inside i spill and this pain is starting to kill these wounds arent healing im loosing all feeling lost in the darkness bleeding from the inside -Fin- dont laugh at me..most of my poems are songs i wrote only without the music |
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Jun 21 2004, 08:35 PM
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 Rock like a GIRL.. Group: Member Posts: 250 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 13,434 |
thats really good... but try not to focus so hard on rhyming. you can express truer feelings without that hassle...
  but still. very, very good. 
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isrt2crashNburn3 Poems...by er..me Jun 21 2004, 06:19 PM
Winter Ah I can relate. I think it's quite good. Jun 22 2004, 08:15 AM × JeNi × das reallie good.. =] itz very deep Jun 25 2004, 02:03 AM _WillSkate4Shoes thats really good, i really liked it! Jun 26 2004, 08:20 PM
LatinaLady imnot gonna laugh i like it those are good. i feel... Jun 27 2004, 03:43 PM |
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