my new poem..ugh Options

[Edwinbarkhordari...]

please critique it...thanks, your thoughts will be greatly appreciated.


I’m sorry for everything

I wonder day by day,
As to why I feel this way

Contemplating my own actions,
Reverting to past fractions,

I ask myself,
Why people do the things they do?
And say the things they say?

I’m sorry for everything,
Everything I put you and your heart through
I’m sorry for breaking your promises
I’m sorry for not trying hard enough,
I’m sorry for not understanding you,
I’m sorry for everything


I cannot express my love,
You are the sun on my dark gloomy days
I love you, I need you, you are my everything
I'd do anything to make you happy if you just trust me.

[Marlons]

So by the ugh you wrote, I'm guessing you don't like it? It's short and sweet. Your rhyming scheme is pretty cool too. It's good.