Faint Euphoria |
 Jan 6 2008, 09:51 PM
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Faint Euphoria
A glistening eye The loss of a tear The growth of a mind Faint Euphoria A sound so divine The stretch of a dream A love to be bind Faint Euphoria A color so pure The birth of a child A sky of azure Faint Euphoria A feeling of glee A day of merry A trickle of gay Faint Euphoria |
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Jan 9 2008, 01:18 AM
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 We're in for one wild night. Group: Member Posts: 402 Joined: Dec 2007 Member No: 603,255 |
It's pretty good, I liked your choice of words. However, the "a love to be bind" part doesn't naturally flow. It should be bound or binded, i'm sure you thought about those words and somewhat realized they don't fit too well though.
Good job overall imo. 
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SilentLaugh Faint Euphoria Jan 6 2008, 09:51 PM
MrStrife Well I think I'd be more ecstatic than faint, ... Jan 8 2008, 01:08 AM
jaeman That's really good, the words pulled me in and... Jan 10 2008, 06:13 AM |
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