My Attempt at Poetry, five minute creation |
 Nov 7 2007, 03:52 AM
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 the 1&only Danny Dahl  Group: Member Posts: 149 Joined: Apr 2007 Member No: 518,959  |
 I was talking with a buddy of mine, and something I said happened to rhyme. He joked that I should write a poem, but laughed and didn't think I could. So we both gave eachother five minutes to each write a poem and create a picture with it, so we could compare. This was my five minute creation. Feedback is much appreciated. |
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Nov 7 2007, 03:58 AM
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 isketchaholic Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 2,977 Joined: Apr 2007 Member No: 516,154 |
In line 12, is that supposed to be 'neither a brush nor paint' or did you do that purposely?
good job on the rest 
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--DANNY-- My Attempt at Poetry Nov 7 2007, 03:52 AM
--DANNY-- Thanks for pointing that out.
I didn't proofre... Nov 7 2007, 04:05 AM doiink maybe it could be " in search of answers ... Nov 7 2007, 04:14 AM --DANNY-- Ooh, that does sound better
I basically wanted t... Nov 7 2007, 04:18 AM
yrrnotelekktric QUOTE(--DANNY-- @ Nov 7 2... Jan 14 2008, 09:19 PM The Markster I think this should go under Interests > Writin... Nov 7 2007, 04:51 AM --DANNY-- Indeed it should
I didn't know there was a wr... Nov 7 2007, 05:04 AM --DANNY-- Added a line Dec 7 2007, 11:08 AM jaeman You should try writing a sonnet, you'll do goo... Jan 15 2008, 06:30 AM |
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