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girl found dead, as mensioned in "i'm insane"
ryfitaDF
post Jun 16 2004, 12:31 AM
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GIRL FOUND DEAD
This morning on the edge of town
A beautiful female corpse was found
She was ivory skinned with a tint of blue
For the weather’s cold with days anew
Her hair was cut to shoulder blades
A reddish brown, lip color fades
Her eyelids hid pupils of green
A given for the departed queen
She wore a nightgown, smooth and silk
Her breasts held fat, too young for milk
She lay, askew, on freeway side
A goddess not dead or alive

Her face was to quiet for repulsion
It gave me no need for propulsion
But, instead, it drew me nearer
It felt all right. It felt not queer
I retract her from the soil brown
And move her from the edge of town
And take her back, into my home
From now on I’ll never be alone

All the living hate me
And so I love the dead
But can the dead ever love me?

In the bed room, I lay awake
My heart for this dead girl to take
Her serene façade puts me in bliss
I feel such warmth with her frozen kiss
I hold her close, in my arms tight
No warm blood could bring such delight
Her lack-there-of just steals my breath
As we embrace in love, in death

All the living hate me
And so I love the dead
But can the dead ever love me?

My final thought: my saving grace
I can’t stay with her in this place
She beat me to our destiny
I see her waiting there for me
Her teeth light paths to cemetery gate
My arm: the wrist to lacerate
As we feast on each other’s blood
Forever, deep in death and love

All the living hated me
And so I loved the dead
It’s clear the dead also love me.

(pg 13 version)
 
 
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inn0centmarianne
post Jun 16 2004, 02:43 PM
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wow, you got a great talent for writing. but wow, that made me look deeper into myself, makes me think. death.. i dont even want to think about it. but great job, keep it coming happy.gif
 

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ryfitaDF   girl found dead   Jun 16 2004, 12:31 AM
Disappearing Boy   cool that was awsome keep it up   Jun 16 2004, 12:34 AM
Winter   Wow... Your work has always made me speechless and...   Jun 16 2004, 04:38 AM
emptyminded   Wow. That made me think. I really was ingulfed i...   Jun 16 2004, 06:44 AM
ryfitaDF   you're pullin my leg. i'm not THAT good. ...   Jun 16 2004, 12:15 PM
megmanson   QUOTEyou're pullin my leg. i'm not THAT g...   Jan 25 2005, 05:23 PM
Yemmerz   Yeah you are that good. ADMIT IT! Hey, PM me t...   Jun 16 2004, 12:21 PM
Luster Soldier   Wow, that's awesome! Really deep and eerie...   Jun 16 2004, 12:29 PM
inn0centmarianne   wow, you got a great talent for writing. but wow, ...   Jun 16 2004, 02:43 PM
Kathleen   Good job, Lunchbox. As for the rated-R version, c...   Jun 16 2004, 03:08 PM
ryfitaDF   i wanna thank all you guys. you're giving me s...   Jun 19 2004, 12:39 AM
Winter   You really are talented at this! Keep it up...   Jun 19 2004, 01:45 AM
lozerface87   ...odd...but i want the other version! good jo...   Jun 19 2004, 02:35 PM
shortie09   that was awesome. it captivated my interest.   Jun 20 2004, 10:56 PM
MyVermilionPlague   I'm aware that this is an old topic.. but just...   Jan 12 2005, 01:45 AM
wind&fire   nearer and queer dont really rhyme... good decrip...   Jan 12 2005, 06:26 PM
tyedyefroggy   Old or not its an awesome topic It really caught ...   Jan 12 2005, 08:34 PM
tooeffingcrazy   Wow. Really really good. It gives me a vivid image...   Jan 12 2005, 11:56 PM
stephinika   wow this is great...very emotional. contains very ...   Jan 16 2005, 04:27 PM
krispy_kreme333   damn this is amazing! i love it, so dark. can ...   Jan 19 2005, 11:04 AM
captured_serenity   woah that's deep, but i like it...   Jan 19 2005, 11:06 AM
Gypsy Eyes   I am in awe. Great job. Can you pm me the other ve...   Jan 25 2005, 07:32 PM
ryfitaDF   "I am in awe. Great job. Can you pm me the ot...   Jan 25 2005, 07:40 PM


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