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 Jun 5 2007, 07:46 PM
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crayons and swing sets
hide and go seek the sounds of youth fading from our ears like a long lost hello a moment - it's gone a new beginning car keys and credit cards taking over and trying to consume but we blaze on with splendor creating our own world of extravagance finding our luster and defining our future |
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Jun 25 2007, 09:03 AM
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QUOTE(rawrhallelujah @ Jun 6 2007, 01:46 AM)  crayons and swing sets hide and go seek the sounds of youth fading from our ears like a long lost hello a moment - it's gone a new beginning its that first stanza that does it for me!! it just realli describes the long lost childhood memorys!! |
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rawrhallelujah growth Jun 5 2007, 07:46 PM
UniversalRoyalty I like it.
The last two lines of each stanza reall... Jun 5 2007, 10:47 PM rawrhallelujah ah
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it took me a surprisingly long time to g... Jun 13 2007, 12:55 PM tilanguyenar What about these?:
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-mzkandi Jun 14 2007, 02:25 PM MyMichelle QUOTEtaking over
and trying to consume
I'm not... Jun 19 2007, 02:34 PM malakarer Deleted. -HakunaMatata Jun 20 2007, 12:11 AM
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