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[poetwritremokid]

From the day I opened my eyes;
I hated the thought of love and life;
Now with the thought of you;
I can't talk it anymore;
You gave all this CRAP because I am me;
I am sick of you and this thing called L-I-F-E;
The life I have isn't good enough and isn't up to standard for you and now it will be OVER between you and me FOREVER;
You are just so pointless right now;
Judging me like I am some movie or song;
Labeling me;
Chosing what I am even thought you would never know me;
Leave me alone;
Let me be;
I get enough from people like you;
Stairing into space;
Ignoring words;
ITS NOT WORKING;
JUST FORGET I LIVE AND LET ME BE!




just let me be....

[*Uronacid*]

Well I know the criticism that Jeremy gave was harsh, but if you're looking for criticisms on your work you have to learn accept negative criticism too (even if it's as "negative" as Jeremy's). Jeremy thinks that you're work is unoriginal... He thinks that you should try writing about other things. Personally, I think that it's unoriginal too. I see way to many of these "I feel bad" poems floating around cB. I guess I would like to see something new also.

I guess Jeremy is writing an "I feel bad" poem as we speak... just to prove a point... >.>

Keep writing, you'll get better.