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[poetwritremokid]

From the day I opened my eyes;
I hated the thought of love and life;
Now with the thought of you;
I can't talk it anymore;
You gave all this CRAP because I am me;
I am sick of you and this thing called L-I-F-E;
The life I have isn't good enough and isn't up to standard for you and now it will be OVER between you and me FOREVER;
You are just so pointless right now;
Judging me like I am some movie or song;
Labeling me;
Chosing what I am even thought you would never know me;
Leave me alone;
Let me be;
I get enough from people like you;
Stairing into space;
Ignoring words;
ITS NOT WORKING;
JUST FORGET I LIVE AND LET ME BE!




just let me be....

[*Intercourse.*]

It sounds like a quote to be honest with you. Also I think Shelby was just trying to give you her opinion. Which is what this forum is for, if you want to show off your work your going to get comments you like and ones you don't like -shrugs-

I think it sounds okay, I think it still needs some touching up. You already said yourself that it wasn't done so I'll have to check back then.. Its decent so far though