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| *mishyerr* |
 Feb 14 2007, 09:05 PM
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She sits arched, posed, silent;
her eyes aware of every little second and movement Clenching her head in her hands - She is not resting, Her head held up by the rigidity of her spine. Simply, but quietly her last collapse, her eyes drop Head falls into expectant hands ------- This is a random poem I wrote a few weeks ago. Opinions? |
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| *mishyerr* |
Feb 15 2007, 09:52 PM
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It's actually just a girl sitting at her desk; she's very tense at first, so she's not really relaxing and letting her head rest. Then, she finally "collapses" and she sort of "falls" into the position she was already set up in. If that makes sense. lol
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mishyerr Collapse Feb 14 2007, 09:05 PM
*.brokendoll.* Good :] Verry good :] great use of imagery Feb 14 2007, 09:07 PM Kathleen I like it.. except for I'm confused about her ... Feb 15 2007, 12:31 PM Señorita Semi-Automatic I really like your imagery! The subject is als... Feb 20 2007, 12:07 AM
mishyerr QUOTE(Señorita Semi-Automatic @ Feb 20 2... Feb 20 2007, 07:44 PM lalalaLANUH AHH I get it now.
Originally I was with Kathleen. ... Feb 21 2007, 10:10 AM |
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