Untitled, It's about intimacy. |
 Feb 10 2007, 01:06 PM
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 Jake - The Unholy Trinity / Premiscuous Poeteer.  Group: Member Posts: 1,272 Joined: May 2006 Member No: 411,316  |
Requited inabilities hinder reqium inadequicies,
Intricately settled by simply common feelings. Gestures awaken the physical soul aroused asunder, And the contact of bodies raise the impitent. The candied practice of love we fail to share splits into oblivion. All intimacy washed away unforgiven. Passionate love romances the beauty from betwixt out eyes, And we are set free into liberty above. |
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Feb 13 2007, 11:25 PM
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I'm Cattt. :] Group: Validating Posts: 1,722 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 130,831 |
I like the meaning you state in this. The first stanza talks about I think falling in love and what is it like. The second states the break up. (If I'm interpreting this the right way.)
I think the transition between the two stanzas is sudden. Perhaps a stanza or two about what usually happens after you go through the first stage of a relationship. |
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