an essay for english, will someone look it over for me? |
 Jan 7 2007, 10:53 PM
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will someone close to my age (im 16. a junior in hs.) read through it and maybe tell me what they think of it?
the "project" was cause and effect. i know it's not the best thing in the world but it's just a draft. QUOTE Cause & Effect taken out. sorry. can someone please close this for me? we submit everything to turnitin.com for our final drafts and the software program scans through every site on the internet to see if we have copied someone else's work. and i definitely dont want this to pop up and then have to explain to the teacher. thank you. =] |
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Jan 8 2007, 05:23 PM
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It's pretty well written. Would you like us to correct any grammatical errors though? I pick up on those really easily when I proofread since I'm a grammar freak.
 QUOTE She spent years in mental institutions and went through countless sessions of ECT (electroconvulsive therapy), but nothing worked. The "but" doesn't require a comma after it, so I removed it. QUOTE I needed to teach myself that there was no price for my soul for her return. And, that in no way was this somehow my fault. There shouldn't be a comma after the "And." Perhaps you could create a new sentence like "I also needed to teach myself this was in no way my fault" so there isn't a sentence fragment? |
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