my poetry, please rate it |
 Jun 5 2004, 12:36 PM
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 Live Your Own Party  Group: Member Posts: 1,261 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 7,489  |
hey everyone. i really love to write poetry and i was wondering what you think. can you like rate it on a scale from one to ten please? here it is.......................
so simple you say it's so simple but i can't wear that dimple that stays plastered on your face but all i'm doing is running in place you say that i'm all alone but at least i'm not a clone of all those people and don't act like i have their seiple you say that i'm immature but that just proves it i always knew that you were insecure and now you have lost that old wit like a shield you wear that mask like a shield conseal your eyes and always yeild i sould warn you life is slipping away but you cannot see what your life was meant to be you know i'll catch you to break your fall but i can't always be there on your call i have tons more that should be saved on my computer, but my computer is being evil. i'll add some other poetry some time soon!! 
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Jun 5 2004, 12:39 PM
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 durian Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 13,124 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,860 |
QUOTE(rOckThISshYt @ Jun 5 2004, 12:36 PM) hey everyone. i really love to write poetry and i was wondering what you think. can you like rate it on a scale from one to ten please? here it is....................... so simple you say it's so simple but i can't wear that dimple that stays plastered on your face but all i'm doing is running in place you say that i'm all alone but at least i'm not a clone of all those people and don't act like i have their seiple you say that i'm immature but that just proves it i always knew that you were insecure and now you have lost that old wit like a shield you wear that mask like a shield conseal your eyes and always yeild i sould warn you life is slipping away but you cannot see what your life was meant to be you know i'll catch you to break your fall but i can't always be there on your call i have tons more that should be saved on my computer, but my computer is being evil. i'll add some other poetry some time soon!! I like the second one =D lol the first one.. aww... funny.. I have a dimple >< of course i'm a girl though..  or am I? 
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rOckThISshYt my poetry Jun 5 2004, 12:36 PM
rOckThISshYt lol. thanks. i like the first one too, but the sec... Jun 5 2004, 12:43 PM
rOckThISshYt here are some more of my poems:::
my hell hole
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