Blah, summer homework., descriptive writing Options

[sarcastic biscui...]

"Unfortunate though it is, you still have a debt to pay, an obligation to those who have been harmed," he coolly stated, with a tinge of steely frost in his voice. She turned to face the blazing abyss, the fire dancing in her eyes. "Did you really think-" she stopped short. The flames reached a point of intensity, raging like the waves of the sea where, on the ship, it began. But it had spread - spread to the waters, feeding on floating chunks of loose driftwood. Like a leafy vine of flames, it slithered and snaked to the shore, wrapping tendrils of fire around anything it could. The heat blazed in the girl's face, but still she stood, entranced by the twisting and turning of the fire. As it reached its final destination, the girl remained frozen, the insatiable hunger of the inferno crying out for more to devour. Tentatively it approached, reaching forward little by little. A small whisper of fear escaped the girl's lips as the flames consumed her. "And by her own fire," the man smirked, delicately stepping over the dying embers. "Fitting."

Around 200 words, describing:
a) a person you do not know
b) a landscape or place (large or small) in the daylight
c) a landscape of place at night

So, how is it? Are the characters too vague?

[sakaitone]

Around 200 words, describing:
a) a person you do not know
b) a landscape or place (large or small) in the daylight
c) a landscape of place at night

So, how is it? Are the characters too vague?

No, I think it's pretty good but when someone talks, you have to break in a new paragraph.