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post May 23 2004, 09:29 PM
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as the stars beam light onto the optic lense of mine
i peer across the plane to where the roses grow divine.
twards the sun they spurt. feasting on morning dew
they resemble me as i grow fond to you
drawing closer in persuit of your epiphany
i would sail in dreadful waters without cavelry
the signs on this oddysey warning me :wrong way!
but this heart of mine can't help it. i must disobey.


i just threw that together in a few minutes. how am i?
 
 
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post May 24 2004, 06:52 PM
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QUOTE(Kathleen @ May 24 2004, 10:57 AM)
persuit - pursuit
cavelry - calvary

Other than that, sounds good to me, Lunchbox. _smile.gif thumbsup.gif I thought you didn't like to read, though. huh.gif Did you ever read The Oddesey?

I think he means cavalry, as in horse soldiers, not calvary, as in Jesus's death.
 

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