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 May 21 2004, 08:29 PM
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Hold me close and near Keep me away from the pain I fear Protect me now because I'm not as strong as I once was I fell through it all Watched me sink deeper and fall Capsized in my dreams Alone on my own as it seems From one second to the next I had it all and then nothing like the rest As I see death ahead I remember there you were - nothing said |
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May 22 2004, 12:41 PM
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 Liv's Secret Lover *shhhh*  Group: Member Posts: 201 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 14,229 |
I like your writing style Kathleen, it's beautifully strung together. Nothing wrong with basic rhymes. Besides, I don't know many people who could rhyme a word like "Soliloquy" or something like that. Big words are often unnecessary.
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Kathleen Fear May 21 2004, 08:29 PM
EmeraldKnight :claps: another good one.. they should have a rati... May 21 2004, 08:32 PM Kathleen Hehe you're too nice. This is back when I didn... May 21 2004, 08:39 PM EmeraldKnight haha I see.. who says you need lots of diff words ... May 21 2004, 08:43 PM Kathleen Hehe...well I just see mine as...plain, I suppose?... May 21 2004, 08:52 PM EmeraldKnight QUOTEHehe...well I just see mine as...plain, I sup... May 21 2004, 09:06 PM xtremeliquid Its pretty good. May 22 2004, 04:16 PM
NatiMarie It's really good Kathleen. =) Wow, you're ... May 23 2004, 01:42 PM |
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