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 Mar 2 2006, 09:20 PM
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make up your mind girl this is not your world we dont play your games we dont like the same things causing callouses to come rubbing cheeks with our thumbs and a heartbeat rapid, beautiful, girl you know we want to see it. two my soul is singing along with yours sure, it can sing your notes but it loves to sing its own because together notes opposite and compared are beautiful and though time is frail and stiff in a place where we can not do all we wish restrictions chaff and itch against legs and grants are not always to sniff i can never get enough like a drug, like a dream, like a song inside a scream i forever want you. |
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Mar 4 2006, 02:23 PM
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 I love Havasupai Group: Member Posts: 1,040 Joined: Jul 2005 Member No: 163,878 |
The last stanza is fantastic. It's a powerful ending. Glad to see you're still writing!
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RiddleMeWonders one, and two. Mar 2 2006, 09:20 PM
shes out Agreed. Awesome work<3 Mar 4 2006, 03:14 PM |
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