A Theory on Love, Very Short Peom |
 Feb 25 2006, 01:37 AM
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A Theory on Love
Short Poetry....by Eria -------------------------------- Confusion A fusion of dank disillusion With profound ideas made forlorn... Defined with? Monotony, a pledge for monogamy to which we must conform! Allision The construction of two souls for another But fission costs dear to the norm. Defined with? Fiction, a mix of contradiction with fires brought up in the storm. ------------------------------------ Comments/Critique? What do you think? |
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Feb 25 2006, 01:47 AM
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It's consice and breif. I suggest writing more words to help the reader get an understanding of the feeling. What you did here is more of a lecture kinda...
but otherwise, I like the use of words and how everything fits in. propz! |
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EriaNight A Theory on Love Feb 25 2006, 01:37 AM
xblueradiance Very nice. It's short, yes, but the use of wor... Mar 1 2006, 06:45 PM shes out It's sounds good =] your use of words were goo... Mar 1 2006, 06:52 PM
ranniel It's great, it's short.. It's the thin... Mar 1 2006, 07:54 PM |
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