Choke Options

[razbus]

Choke me
Use both hands
Pull me apart strand by strand
Crush into pieces
and bury into sand
How am i supposed to know exactly who i am?
I feel like shit....and....
there's nothing i can do about it.

Don't love me.
Why bother?
While im drowning in shallow water?
you broke me
maybe all for the better
my heart in a blender
but wouldn't you know it?...
i kept every one of your letters.

and i feel like shit...
but you dont know the half

Im lonely
but im not crying
these arent tears
i just have something in my eye
two storys told
One story ... lie.

and i feel like shit...
and you can never get enough

I hate you.

[Paradox of Life]

I agree with wind&fire. The rhyming scheme is really inconsistent, and when you do rhyme, it sounds childish ... I think the word choice could have been better. I like the concept though. I like these lines:

'Im lonely
but im not crying
these arent tears'

Nice job.