Strong Love, short poem not finished yet? |
 Jan 8 2006, 11:14 AM
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 Call me C.Annie  Group: Member Posts: 366 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 115,994  |
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So she sits and listens to a sorrowful song and it reminds herself that everyones gone theres no one to cry to and just one to love so she crys at night and sings to above and she sings God help me I think Im in love but I cant help it hes all I think of theres something wrong but I have to have to stay strong |
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Jan 9 2006, 02:00 AM
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 I'd rather make mistakes than break. Group: Member Posts: 121 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 117,869 |
I like the consistent rhyme, and even though the concept of love in poetry has become cliche and overused, I emotion felt really authentic for once.
xoxo Aly |
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Annie5332 Strong Love Jan 8 2006, 11:14 AM
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