there you go, poem, depressing. |
 Jan 3 2006, 08:00 PM
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 can't touch this  Group: Member Posts: 174 Joined: Dec 2005 Member No: 323,184  |
and im shattered all over again
funny how you promised me you'd wait and there you go, leaving before im ready leaving me lost and so.. hurt. but it's okay, as long as it's not you. and it's peachy keen if i'm dying and i'm trying so hard to hold on it's okay if the tears that i'm crying aren't spilled on you. and you told me "i'm yours forever" but forever's not quite as long as it seems and i'm still kind of lost at how you can.. just lose your interest in your dreams something you've cherished so long how could you just..forget? ---------------- meh kind of how i feel just thrown out on paper, no revisions i havent written in a while so this probably sucks comments and..crits. |
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Jan 3 2006, 10:05 PM
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 some reason i feel alone...guess cus my true self is never shown Group: Member Posts: 303 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 246,804 |
no it doesnt suck its really good
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sharpandcuddly there you go Jan 3 2006, 08:00 PM
vash1530 advice- make those revisions then repost Jan 3 2006, 10:37 PM illumineering Your point-of-view drifts and makes it hard to tra... Jan 3 2006, 11:12 PM
azn_at_heart wasnt hard for me to read it Jan 4 2006, 12:08 AM illumineering QUOTE(azn_at_heart @ Jan 4 2006, 1:08 AM)wasn... Jan 4 2006, 12:19 AM |
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