Poems for all the CB writers Options

[AzN_AssAul'][']

For the poet in us all. Dunno if this is the right place for the thread, but here ya go. Feel free to post your poetry... And be open to criticism (hopefully constructive!). Here's one of mine...
Hope you like it. And give some cc plz...Ty

Moral Anaesthesia

We were always barred behind
each other's private walls;
with miles of air and oceanic mass,
words unspoken behind bullet-proof glass.
Helpless and stuck in a mere illusion,
a fleeting moment past much too soon;
the promise of God to a fool,
beauty too pure to ever be true.

I bite my lip as
I kiss you goodbye,
try to look away when
my love flies by.

I bite my lip and
repeat the old lie,
try to look away 'cause
boys
don't
cry.

Tonight you tore down all dreams
built with white lies and deceit.
Where I once stood comfortably numb,
I weep and rot deaf, blind and dumb;
Feast in misery like cheap red wine,
the easiest substitute for the truth.
Moral anaesthesia, morphine for the soul -
the price you pay, for losing control.

I bite my lip as
I kiss you goodbye,
try to look away when
my love flies by.

I bite my lip and
repeat the old lie,
try to look away 'cause
boys
don't
cry.

[Haruka]

Wow! all your poems are so nice!
I'd like to share a couple of mine, and i'd REALLY appreciate feed back

I don't think they are all that good, i wrote them kind of fast before going to bed

Perfecton

Do you demand perfection from me
From yourself?
Do you even care if I am perfect?
Maybe you just like to see my flaws
Or point them out
Then you look at yourself
No emotion
It’s all fake
Your flaws are covered
By the person you pretend to be
Tell me…
Do you demand perfection
From a flawless person?

Do you demand perfection
From a person with nothing but flaws?
Do you laugh or do you cry
Seeing this lack of perfection?
Doi you even care?
If a flaw is perfect,
Can perfection be a flaw?
No emotion
Nothing hits you
Until you have the perfect flaw
It’s all fake
All your perfection
Is a flaw

~

Happiness

The happiness in your eyes
Fades away with my smile
You kill my warmth
With your piercing eyes
My soul is at your mercy
And your heart dominates mine
I don’t want to die alone
Come with me
For the sake of my happiness
Let me die with you

If you noticed, the first two lines of the last one are in my signature =P

Well, tell me what you think!