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 Nov 16 2005, 11:17 PM
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Well yea we're doing speeches in english class and I not wanting to do any real work chose a topic with little to no research involved.The topic was proving that Wyoming(sorry if this offends any wyomingians).But I've run out of ideas to disporve o it you have any good one please feel free to post them. Thanks for the help
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Nov 20 2005, 06:21 PM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
um, ok. i just read that.
First of all, i hope you aren't turning this in for school. The grammer is only so-so, alot of commas and stuff misplaced, and you are jumping out and talking out to the "audience" alot, like saying "you know, blah, blah." "So i implore you..." 2nd, there is no evidence backing up all your "theories" on why Wyoming doesn't exist. (oh gosh). You said something about mole people, painted landscapes, kidnapped people or something? Where is your evidence? Where are your sources to back up your paper? You also use the words "they" "you" alot...Who are they exactly? The government? This paper needs alot of work, not to mention how absurd it was in the first place, but i'm looking past that right now lol |
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Nov 22 2005, 06:19 AM
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 yan lin♥ Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 14,129 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 13,627 |
QUOTE(KissMe2408 @ Nov 21 2005, 7:21 AM) um, ok. i just read that. First of all, i hope you aren't turning this in for school. The grammer is only so-so, alot of commas and stuff misplaced, and you are jumping out and talking out to the "audience" alot, like saying "you know, blah, blah." "So i implore you..." 2nd, there is no evidence backing up all your "theories" on why Wyoming doesn't exist. (oh gosh). You said something about mole people, painted landscapes, kidnapped people or something? Where is your evidence? Where are your sources to back up your paper? You also use the words "they" "you" alot...Who are they exactly? The government? This paper needs alot of work, not to mention how absurd it was in the first place, but i'm looking past that right now lol  i agree, you need to work on the grammar bit. even though it may be creative writing, the grammar needs to be decent. |
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BambooRckshw Helped needed Nov 16 2005, 11:17 PM
mzkandi When is this assignment due? Nov 16 2005, 11:20 PM BambooRckshw not far a few days our teacher hasnt given us a du... Nov 16 2005, 11:36 PM KissMe2408 Wait? Approving or Disapproving on Wyoming? And wh... Nov 17 2005, 12:35 AM BambooRckshw Oh sorry if i wasnt clear before hand i am trying ... Nov 17 2005, 01:05 AM mipadi Why would Wyoming not exist? Nov 17 2005, 10:56 AM aera the fact that there is a Wyoming proves that Wyomi... Nov 17 2005, 09:14 PM BambooRckshw ok, even with all the nonbelievers I still managed... Nov 20 2005, 02:39 AM
BambooRckshw umm its creative writing you dont need all that mu... Nov 21 2005, 12:19 AM
KissMe2408 QUOTE(BambooRckshw @ Nov 16 2005, 11:17 PM)We... Nov 22 2005, 07:04 PM |
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