rap part 2, stay tuned... |
| *Statistik* |
 Nov 16 2005, 04:07 PM
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I hustle till the sun come down, sun rise I wake up//
Back in the day my life was f**ked and it was hard to make up// But I fought through the daze (days), and I got shit submitted// My air force ones, jeans, and my new york fitted// (YEP!) I buy money, know wat i mean??? I bring cash flow// Only time you crash the audience is in a comedy show// Mannn...I'm chilling in the weather, but I can't tell the forecast// Cuz I'm getting a little hungry to death to rhyme, i still cant fasstttttt// (ouch) |
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Nov 20 2005, 01:17 AM
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 Bardic Nation  Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
here's the rule. twista has talent, tupac has soul, and the rest can all go home.
Back on topic. Jason, you should try using poetic devices such as internal rhyme and alliteration. Helps keep the flow when writing in long lines. |
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Statistik rap part 2 Nov 16 2005, 04:07 PM
sikdragon do you really? Nov 16 2005, 04:19 PM
mzbbc QUOTE(sikdragon @ Nov 16 2005, 5:19 PM)do you... Nov 17 2005, 09:16 PM Hiphop d[-_-]b The end confused me. I liked that Daze [days] thin... Nov 16 2005, 08:41 PM nightmare4taki OMG that was Crack Music!!!!!... Nov 17 2005, 08:52 PM L!ckitySplit that was stupid Nov 17 2005, 09:01 PM KissMe2408 I'll def give you props on your effort Jason, ... Nov 18 2005, 11:34 AM let me post QUOTEI buy money, know wat i mean??? I bring cash ... Nov 18 2005, 10:37 PM Paradox of Life QUOTEBack in the day my life was f**ked and it was... Nov 19 2005, 09:50 AM Statistik QUOTE(Paradox of Life @ Nov 19 2005, 9:50 AM)... Nov 19 2005, 02:36 PM Paradox of Life QUOTE(Jason61992 @ Nov 19 2005, 1:36 PM)Since... Nov 22 2005, 10:20 AM Statistik QUOTE(Paradox of Life @ Nov 22 2005, 10:20 AM... Nov 22 2005, 04:06 PM helllla jankyyyy Yeah the end was confusing.
QUOTEBut I fought thr... Nov 19 2005, 04:40 PM sikdragon if you know what fasting is, the end is not confus... Nov 19 2005, 07:05 PM nightmare4taki ^LOL Robb you are slowman. Nov 19 2005, 10:12 PM Statistik I can't consider rappers like 50 cent to be po... Nov 19 2005, 10:14 PM |
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