Cigarette, a poem |
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 Oct 12 2005, 05:44 PM
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CIGARETTE
06/05/06 I pulled out my cigarette Wishing I didn't have to do this So many times a day Such a bittersweet soothness to my mind I breathe in tainted air Remembering you were the air I used to breathe Ashes fall, scattering in the wind As I tap the sorrow away with trembling fingers Smoke lingers and fades Unlike this love, this pain that will never leave me As the cigarette reaches its bitter end I open my eyes Everytime I realize you're no longer here To see my cry |
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Nov 7 2005, 09:24 PM
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 I'd rather make mistakes than break.  Group: Member Posts: 121 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 117,869 |
I like how descriptive this was.
Godo job. |
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torngemini Cigarette Oct 12 2005, 05:44 PM
iNyCxShoRT Very nice, I love the little details you added in ... Oct 14 2005, 08:38 PM skp86 cool Oct 21 2005, 03:17 PM
mzkandi QUOTE(skp86 @ Oct 21 2005, 4:17 PM)cool
But... Oct 24 2005, 09:34 PM rainnydaiis Really lovely metaphors that you used here. Its am... Oct 21 2005, 04:23 PM mipadi Lovely use of metaphor. Oct 23 2005, 08:29 PM not_your_average Yes, the metaphor really makes the poem. However, ... Oct 23 2005, 08:31 PM stephinika great metaphor use and imagery. i quite liked this... Oct 24 2005, 09:04 PM torngemini thank you Oct 30 2005, 06:49 PM o0olaalaa i like it =) Oct 30 2005, 06:55 PM simx very descriptive... interesting... I like it Nov 7 2005, 09:29 PM xsign_my_heartx Nice. I really liked it. Nov 9 2005, 10:39 PM RiddleMeWonders Great writing.
I almost started to cry reading it... Nov 9 2005, 11:27 PM |
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