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 Oct 21 2005, 04:30 PM
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SOS Brigade!!  Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775  |
Hmm heres another one just to add .
My life so vacant robbed of words no one can understand how I feel my heart so enclosed robbed of feelings no one can open and see how I feel My mind so empty robbed of thoughts robbed of everything I have I gave it all away just because I chose to live life in a sinful way |
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Oct 26 2005, 03:37 PM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
^exactly!
I think it was great :) I liked how you tied it in at the end. Some of the greatest poems have the weirdest grammer, punctuation, and are so confusing! (example=the wasteland by ts eliott) Great job! keep it up! |
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rainnydaiis Life so vacant Oct 21 2005, 04:30 PM
Midnight Faerie Wow, I really liked that. It's effective in i... Oct 21 2005, 11:15 PM mipadi I don't know, I feel like it doesn't reall... Oct 23 2005, 08:24 PM not_your_average ^ Agreed. I didn't really feel anything after ... Oct 23 2005, 08:29 PM rainnydaiis Haha I don't think free write would need such ... Oct 25 2005, 03:35 PM
mipadi QUOTE(KissMe2408 @ Oct 26 2005, 4:37 PM)^exac... Oct 26 2005, 03:40 PM |
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