Cigarette, a poem |
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 Oct 12 2005, 05:44 PM
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CIGARETTE
06/05/06 I pulled out my cigarette Wishing I didn't have to do this So many times a day Such a bittersweet soothness to my mind I breathe in tainted air Remembering you were the air I used to breathe Ashes fall, scattering in the wind As I tap the sorrow away with trembling fingers Smoke lingers and fades Unlike this love, this pain that will never leave me As the cigarette reaches its bitter end I open my eyes Everytime I realize you're no longer here To see my cry |
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Oct 21 2005, 04:23 PM
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Really lovely metaphors that you used here. Its amazing how they really relate with one another. Awesome job. Hope to see more of these kinds of poems. They just get to me =P.
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torngemini Cigarette Oct 12 2005, 05:44 PM
iNyCxShoRT Very nice, I love the little details you added in ... Oct 14 2005, 08:38 PM skp86 cool Oct 21 2005, 03:17 PM
mzkandi QUOTE(skp86 @ Oct 21 2005, 4:17 PM)cool
But... Oct 24 2005, 09:34 PM mipadi Lovely use of metaphor. Oct 23 2005, 08:29 PM not_your_average Yes, the metaphor really makes the poem. However, ... Oct 23 2005, 08:31 PM stephinika great metaphor use and imagery. i quite liked this... Oct 24 2005, 09:04 PM torngemini thank you Oct 30 2005, 06:49 PM o0olaalaa i like it =) Oct 30 2005, 06:55 PM agirlnamed_aly I like how descriptive this was.
Godo job. Nov 7 2005, 09:24 PM simx very descriptive... interesting... I like it Nov 7 2005, 09:29 PM xsign_my_heartx Nice. I really liked it. Nov 9 2005, 10:39 PM RiddleMeWonders Great writing.
I almost started to cry reading it... Nov 9 2005, 11:27 PM |
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