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Cigarette, a poem
*torngemini*
post Oct 12 2005, 05:44 PM
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CIGARETTE
06/05/06

I pulled out my cigarette
Wishing I didn't have to do this
So many times a day
Such a bittersweet soothness to my mind
I breathe in tainted air
Remembering you were the air I used to breathe
Ashes fall, scattering in the wind
As I tap the sorrow away with trembling fingers
Smoke lingers and fades
Unlike this love, this pain that will never leave me
As the cigarette reaches its bitter end
I open my eyes
Everytime I realize you're no longer here
To see my cry
 
 
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post Oct 14 2005, 08:38 PM
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Very nice, I love the little details you added in there wink.gif
 

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torngemini   Cigarette   Oct 12 2005, 05:44 PM
iNyCxShoRT   Very nice, I love the little details you added in ...   Oct 14 2005, 08:38 PM
skp86   cool   Oct 21 2005, 03:17 PM
mzkandi   QUOTE(skp86 @ Oct 21 2005, 4:17 PM)cool But...   Oct 24 2005, 09:34 PM
rainnydaiis   Really lovely metaphors that you used here. Its am...   Oct 21 2005, 04:23 PM
mipadi   Lovely use of metaphor.   Oct 23 2005, 08:29 PM
not_your_average   Yes, the metaphor really makes the poem. However, ...   Oct 23 2005, 08:31 PM
stephinika   great metaphor use and imagery. i quite liked this...   Oct 24 2005, 09:04 PM
torngemini   thank you   Oct 30 2005, 06:49 PM
o0olaalaa   i like it =)   Oct 30 2005, 06:55 PM
agirlnamed_aly   I like how descriptive this was. Godo job.   Nov 7 2005, 09:24 PM
simx   very descriptive... interesting... I like it   Nov 7 2005, 09:29 PM
xsign_my_heartx   Nice. I really liked it.   Nov 9 2005, 10:39 PM
RiddleMeWonders   Great writing. I almost started to cry reading it...   Nov 9 2005, 11:27 PM


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