slipping away, i found it saved on my computer... |
 Sep 11 2005, 01:48 PM
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I feel you slipping away again
Slipping right through my hands Leaving and empty space in my heart. The space I'd reserved for you. Slipping away I feel you Slipping away Ever so far away I can feel you've gone. You've left me empty handed And alone to walk through This unforgiving place we call home Left me wandering aimlessly with an empty soul You are now broken-heartedly unforgiven I can feel you've slipped away Leaving me here on my own to wander this Unforgiving place we call home, While you half-heartedly saunter away |
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Sep 11 2005, 02:32 PM
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 i'm such a sucker sometimes. Group: Member Posts: 441 Joined: Jun 2005 Member No: 151,732 |
I've read a couple of your other poems, and now I have affirmed that you are an excellent writer. This song is wonderfully woven, showing the raw emotion of losing someone you held dear. If only it was a tad bit longer, and a bit more revised. But other than that, I love it.
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xstab.my.heartx slipping away Sep 11 2005, 01:48 PM
mishyerr Reminds me of a song..
it's cute. <3 Sep 11 2005, 01:50 PM xstab.my.heartx Actually, I think it was supposed to be a song... Sep 11 2005, 01:52 PM xstab.my.heartx Ha. Me, an excellent writer?
Okay,
Thanks ^.^ Sep 11 2005, 02:54 PM fatal emotions I agree with Lauren. You are an excellent writer. Sep 13 2005, 05:46 PM RiddleMeWonders You're def. not a boring read, that's for ... Sep 13 2005, 08:54 PM xd0rkette Aww. This poem's pretty good. Sometimes I feel... Sep 14 2005, 01:12 PM
yukichan I like it..Its really plain and simple.. Sep 15 2005, 02:12 AM |
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