Valiant Ones, A poem deidicated to the military... |
 Sep 6 2005, 10:14 PM
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*~*Valiant Ones*~*
A you are tearing for those On the battlefield, One thought comes to mind that causes Other thoughts to yield. Maybe these souls didn't die in Vain, Maybe these souls didn't feel the Pain, For their minds were set on Just one small thing. They didn't need to feel, didn't Need to think. For as they lie here, crimson Mixing with the mud, They live on because there's Honor Running in their blood... by Rin-chan |
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Sep 10 2005, 01:08 AM
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I liked it and I kinda like it when some people write in disconnection. It kinda makes me feel like that how people really thing. Most poeple don't think in a linear manner, our thoughts jump around a bit. It's very real and I appreciate the subject that was conveyed.
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rinchan089 Valiant Ones Sep 6 2005, 10:14 PM
kyttiekatt sad.
thats all i hav to say. (except for "tha... Sep 7 2005, 12:08 PM rinchan089 Thanks for reading it, but I don't think it... Sep 7 2005, 12:55 PM dispn0ygonekrazy Im glad you wrote something for the people who die... Sep 9 2005, 12:25 AM yukichan Kind of scares me because my friend is planning to... Sep 9 2005, 03:01 AM rinchan089 Aww... thanks!
I'll pray for your father ... Sep 9 2005, 10:25 PM Paradox of Life I don't really like the rhyme scheme. All your... Sep 9 2005, 11:02 PM
rinchan089 ^^^ Thanks, alot.
Personally, the poem isn't ... Sep 10 2005, 10:41 AM |
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