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 Sep 8 2005, 04:51 PM
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 My desperate heart is far too weak to run for you this long.  Group: Member Posts: 640 Joined: Jun 2005 Member No: 150,342  |
in the rain
drowning the pain away saying goodbye to day good day and goodnight i'll say as i'm drifting away |
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Sep 9 2005, 05:24 PM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
... Boring. If you're going to make the last word rhyme throughout the entire poem, at least don't use the same word twice (away and away).
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Bobblehead425 good night Sep 8 2005, 04:51 PM
WindSorcerous It's kinda corny...like a Dr. Seuss poem. Try ... Sep 9 2005, 05:29 PM
xstab.my.heartx I thought it was okay. Sep 11 2005, 01:12 PM |
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