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 Sep 6 2005, 11:58 PM
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An eternal despair fills thys pure heart With a single doubt of fear cross thou eyes With shattering glass filled with abstract art Nocturnal darkness covers thys disguise Thy lays one eye on thees exquisite face And thy canst not remove thees hooked beauty Remnants blood from thou veins, enmity trace Amorous glance until thy off duty Thou shall remove complete vindication Eliminating dried color blood stain The mountains roars with acceleration And thou shall let go of revenge and pain Thou and thee, is our love true and pure With dove settings in the sky fills obscure |
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Sep 8 2005, 05:49 PM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
Wow, that's a wonderful poem, sweet poem. I love the rhyme scheme and word usage. However, I think the words thy, thou and thee are used a bit too often. I can't quite follow the theme though. Is it love or despair?
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xtremeliquid Love Sep 6 2005, 11:58 PM
rinchan089 Aww... It's so pretty... I love it!
Rin-c... Sep 7 2005, 09:27 AM mipadi Your use of thee, thy, thou, and thine are incorre... Sep 9 2005, 03:29 PM xstab.my.heartx Wow.
Haha.
That's deep. Sep 11 2005, 01:53 PM
mishyerr er, some of what Mipadi said.
But it's pretty... Sep 11 2005, 02:01 PM |
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