I am sorry, Poem |
 Aug 30 2005, 06:05 AM
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-= I am sorry =-
I am sorry for all that I am I am sorry for being nice I am sorry for being understanding I am sorry for being mysterious I am sorry for being smart I am sorry for being pretty I am sorry for being there for you I am sorry for being soft in my ways I am sorry for having a gentle heart I am sorry for letting you fall I am sorry for not being able to stop it I am sorry for not being stronger I am sorry for not being able to forcible hurt you ... damned ... wicked ... doomed ... unforgiven ... evil ... life ? I am sorry... |
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Sep 7 2005, 07:50 PM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
Hm. It's okay. The repitition is a nice touch, but the first few lines are slightly boring and conceited.
'I am sorry for not being able to forcible hurt you' That line makes no sense. I tihnk this needs a lot of revising. |
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Claudel I am sorry Aug 30 2005, 06:05 AM
broken_lance cool!
l love it
good job! Aug 31 2005, 09:18 AM Claudel Yay,thanx im glad you like`it ;-) Sep 1 2005, 08:44 PM LinLinxxkanna yea itz good the title kinda made me notice tho b... Sep 4 2005, 10:32 PM rinchan089 It touches me somehow. It's beautiful!
R... Sep 6 2005, 10:09 PM
Claudel QUOTE(AkaRyux @ Sep 8 2005, 2:50 AM)Hm. It... Sep 11 2005, 12:36 PM torngemini haha straight to the point ... nice Sep 10 2005, 01:09 AM |
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