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Unforsaken Love In the Seasons Past, what do you guys think?
LoST SouL
post Sep 3 2005, 09:02 PM
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Some 1 plz find me, help me find my way..my way bak 2 bliss
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Unforsaken Love In the Seasons Past

The dirty snow of summer time
Lost love
and unspoken rymes
Dreams wilting in the rain
Hearts lost at sea
Souls dieing of pain

The darkening sky of a sunny day
Wishes crushed
Hope has gone so far away
Thinking of you
Tears flowing from my eyes
Panicking
I don't know what to do

The withering of flowers in the spring
Words no spoken
Things not said
I miss you
I'm lonly
Lifeless souls lying in bed

Sunny days and stary nights
My prince charming has arrived
The second you
The trustworthy friend
Tears gone
Wishes fullfilled
Oh how my heart thrives

Love gained
Love lost
What shall i do?
Will you know?
Will you care
No,
Yet nothing can stop me...
Stop me from loving you
 
 
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illumineering
post Sep 4 2005, 10:33 PM
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I love Havasupai
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I feel an all-consuming sense of hopelessness when I read this. The piece is so effectively written that I feel the pain of a co-dependent, first person, sense of loss after reading this. The second "you" only serves to set up the next inevitable fall. How tragic!

True bliss is never found outside the self. The perspective of this piece guarantees there will be a series of these in the immediate future.
 

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