A single rose..., Goodbye |
 Jul 16 2005, 09:22 PM
Post
#1
|
|
 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you!  Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674  |
A Painful Wedding Gift
A single rose I held above, Against the ebony sky, I thought this really was true love, But this was for goodbye, I held it still, its petals clear, With the moon's so haunting glow, The hue, a crimson to match the tear, Inviting more to flow, I want to brush it all aside, And continue on my way, But now I'll never be the bride, I were to be today, The petals now blow in the breeze, The wind is oh so swift, An empty stem hovered over me, This was my wedding gift, Though this I hold I'll forever keep, The last of my last lover's charm, The thorns are digging oh so deep, And the pain trickles down my arm... |
|
|
|
 |
Replies
|
Jul 17 2005, 05:50 PM
Post
#2
|
|
 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 65 Joined: Jul 2005 Member No: 175,738 |
Very nice flow, the last verse was a very nice conclusion and you had the perfect choice of words to convey the message/feeling you were trying to get across.
|
|
|
|
Posts in this topic
Paradox of Life A single rose... Jul 16 2005, 09:22 PM
RockizLife Awesome poem, Katt! Keep up the good work, I l... Jul 16 2005, 09:43 PM Midnight Faerie Mehehe I remember when you were like asking me for... Jul 16 2005, 10:24 PM stephinika very nicely written...i like the idea too. keep it... Jul 16 2005, 10:56 PM lidoxangie aww, really cute&sad, and the flow is smooth .... Jul 17 2005, 12:05 AM
Paradox of Life QUOTE(lidoxangie @ Jul 16 2005, 11:05 PM)aww,... Jul 17 2005, 03:40 AM xXMomoBubbleTeaXx I loved the vibe it gave to me!!..Mysterio... Jul 19 2005, 05:42 PM _suzie_ aw i like it. emotional Jul 21 2005, 11:21 AM ..:loveee.NuTTii You expressed yourself so amazingly. I fell in lo... Jul 21 2005, 04:29 PM yukichan I like it..Its very sad..and has a lot of emotions... Jul 21 2005, 05:58 PM |
1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
0 Members: