To S_____, With Love |
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 Jun 24 2005, 10:51 PM
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To S____, With Love
I'm writing this to tell you I really want you to know I'm here for you in everything you do Don't feel you have to put on a show Be yourself and chase your dream Don't let anyone bring you down I'll always be here through lifes crazy scheme To erase that lonely frown To S____, with love Please spread your wings Soar like a dove Fly right by lifes depressing things Maybe one of these days I'll catch up to you We'll cross ways For you, theres nothing I wouldn't do When you fall I'll be here No need to call I'll wipe away every tear Remember to soar with his guidence from above I conclude this letter, To S____, With Love © Brenden Noll |
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Jun 29 2005, 03:32 AM
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 My weakness is that I care too much. Also that I love you with a  Group: Member Posts: 55 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 130,426 |
I love it very much u dun min dif put one up in here do ya?
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Jun 30 2005, 02:12 AM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
QUOTE(gothicdork @ Jun 29 2005, 2:32 AM) I love it very much u dun min dif put one up in here do ya?  Everyone's welcome to post in the Writing Forum. I love the repetition of the title, but you really should put "Dear Anonymous" or "Dear beloved" or something so it doesn't just look like a blank or typo. Or in my case.. another word  'I'm writing this to tell you I really want you to know I'm here for you in everything you do Don't feel you have to put on a show' Somehow that stanza is just awkward to me. I love the rhyme scheme you used and it's really tough sometimes to make appropriate rhymes for them, but you did an excellent job. Keep up the excellent work! 
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RockizLife To S_____, With Love Jun 24 2005, 10:51 PM
gothicdork That was beautiful. I love it totally. Its very ex... Jun 26 2005, 03:02 AM Spiritual Winged Aura wonderful wonderful, just wonderful. lmao. Jun 26 2005, 03:53 AM ApocalypseAelis Touching.
Great job.
And what's with the ... Jun 28 2005, 03:42 PM Sa-Chan This is sweet. Good job. Jun 28 2005, 05:22 PM
BrokenDream awesome, awesome work! it rhymed like every ve... Jun 30 2005, 12:29 PM x____duckii Aww, that's sweet. Good job. =) Jun 30 2005, 01:09 PM RockizLife Thanks everybody. I'm glad everyone enjoyed it... Jun 30 2005, 01:35 PM
[Deep]Thought63 good writing! Jul 9 2005, 01:41 AM |
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