Cupid's Burden, WHAT DO YOU THINK! Options

[LoST SouL]

i think my writers block is finally gone... what do guys think... all types of feedback apriciated

Cupid's Burden

i wrote you a letter
but that dream of you
died long ago
i wrote you a song
but my tears
washed away the ink
the lyrics i cannot see
the words i can no longer write
i cannot stop thinking
yet i do not think at all
oh what a paradox of mysteries!
in this abyss you call love!
the poems i draft
and the pictures i draw
oh how they are meant for you
they contain my soul
they hold my soul
therefore,
my soul belongs to you
it is my soul
that is filled with love
love
love that is meant to be for you
but this thing we call love
oh what a burden
spread by its goddess
i have been hit
by Cupid's arrows
they pierce my heart,
as i look into your eyes!
your eyes of gold and sliver
everything a girl could want
yet within your eyes
is that hallow darkness of shame
my shame
for i am weak
weakned by you
weakened by my desires
desires to be with you
for that letter i wrote you
i burnt it
because in my dreams
i have no choice
but to accept
that it will never be
happily ever after

[Paradox of Life]

Wow I love it. I agree with kissme2408, it is bittersweet. I thought at first it wasn't going to be very good because it looked choppy and overly long, but after I took time to read it, I found that it was a really great poem. It had so much emotion. A definite favorite out of the poems written here.

Only thing I can critique is your spelling and capitilization. If you were to present this piece someplace, it would have to look a lot more professional.