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 Jun 28 2005, 08:30 AM
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 cellophane chests?  Group: Member Posts: 488 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 75,816  |
I just want to lie here
I just want to die I just want some quiet I just want to deny it I was not loved. I was not sacred. I was not secret. You leave and never look back. Don't cast a glance over your shoulder your looks crush me like a boulder I can't take it you know I'll break it I'll forsake it Just to be happy. I just want to lie here In this quiet The silence I am breathing Not for long It's hard to give up when you've given it your all. |
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Jun 28 2005, 02:23 PM
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 What a hypocrite. Group: Member Posts: 2,754 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 128,150 |
Wow, very well-written, the poem gives a kind of depressed or troublesome mood to it, and the last verse that's underlined and red is my favorite part of the poem. Nice work.
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antix10_kos "incomplete" Jun 28 2005, 08:30 AM
sakaitone so sad and depressing! good job anyway! Jul 1 2005, 03:42 PM mocassinsx29 YAY, good grammar with capitals! <333 Nicel... Jul 1 2005, 04:38 PM
[Deep]Thought63 DEEP! Jul 9 2005, 01:37 AM |
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