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LoST SouL
post Jun 23 2005, 10:41 PM
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Some 1 plz find me, help me find my way..my way bak 2 bliss
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i feel like its missiing something.... feedback please

Your Eyes

Have you ever look some one in the eyes?
What did you see?
I've looked you in the eyes
I see somehting ive tried to hide
As teared filled my eyes
I noticed that in front of you
I cannot cry
I look down at the floor
and try to be strong
i try to run
but you wouldn't let me
i head for the door
and you grab me by the hand
that moment
i realized what you ment to me
in your eyes
i saw everything i wanted
i saw everything i need
oh in your eyes
i feel in love
in love with your compasion
in love with who you are
and what you think of me
that moment was bliss
i wanted to hug you
i wanted to kiss you
i wanted to pour out my soul
that moment i smiled
i smiled for the 1st time in a million years
in your eyes
i see the wrold
the sea
a bright sunny day
i see things i never thought possible
your eyes are my hope
i stare in your eyes
and i ask my self why
"why do i love you so?"
"why do you do this to me?"
"why your eyes?"
 
 
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ChasingLife87
post Jun 23 2005, 10:44 PM
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ich heisse Meli.
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QUOTE(LoST SouL @ Jun 23 2005, 10:41 PM)
I've looked you in the eyes
I see somehting ive tried to hide
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Oh yeah, oh yeah, my favorite lines. I have so felt that.
I think it captures the right mood, most definitely, I do like that. It's very basic, but mine have been recently too... hehe...
 

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