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About A Girl, poem
HiddenSmile
post Jun 13 2005, 05:03 PM
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vat ist dis?
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She steps and spring springs from her step.
As soon as I saw her my heart lept.
The most beautiful thing I'd ever saw,
That type of beauty should be against the law.
I'd seen girls before, but none like this,
I just hope I don't get totally dissed.
I stutter when I talk o her. _unsure.gif
Eveyrone else just becomes a blure.
Her hair flows like a dark brown sea,
Her eyes so bright I can barely see. biggrin.gif
Should I ask her to the dance or not?
She sure seems to like that other guy alot.
I'm just worried that she'll say no, cry.gif
Well, here I go!


Hope you guys like this!!! (I <3 poetry!!!)
 
 
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Paradox of Life
post Jun 13 2005, 06:02 PM
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My name's Katt. Nice to meet you!
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I like it. It flows well and it's really cute.

'Her hair flows like a dark brown sea,
Her eyes so bright I can barely see.'

Love that line. laugh.gif

'The most beautiful thing I'd ever saw,
That type of beauty should be against the law.'

The most beautiful thing I'd ever saw seen.

That sentence was grammatically incorrect and the only major flaw. _smile.gif
 

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HiddenSmile   About A Girl   Jun 13 2005, 05:03 PM
Paradox of Life   I like it. It flows well and it's really cute....   Jun 13 2005, 06:02 PM
azn_r4pf4n   heh. nice poem, reminds me of how im feeling now.   Jun 13 2005, 06:31 PM
mipadi   Off topic, but the title, "About a Girl,...   Jun 13 2005, 07:00 PM
gotblog4me?   Wow, thats good I like it!   Jun 13 2005, 07:23 PM


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