No Longer Living |
 Aug 10 2004, 06:45 AM
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 What the fack.  Group: Official Member Posts: 6,164 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 8,519  |
Um, I wrote this a while ago. 'Posted it on my xanga, and so I guess I'll post it here. Tell me what you think.
No Longer Living I let those words just pass me by Turn around and walk away Blinking away these tears, before I cry I guess I've never been good enough Never been much of a friend I guess I just can't meet up with your standards And so now, I guess this is the end I'll let you live your life As God intended it to be Because now I know that your life Should have never crossed paths with me It feels as if everything around me is no longer alive And now I can recall, that one time when they said That pain can never hurt When everyone around you is dead I'll never regret that time When I met you, on that one day But the one thing I'll always regret Is when I couldn't keep you around to stay |
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Jun 12 2005, 12:24 AM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
Wow, beautifully written. Me loves this! Why is the first stanza only 3 lines?
I love these lines: 'Because now I know that your life Should have never crossed paths with me' But it would make more sense if you said: 'Because now I know that you Should have never crossed paths with me' Great job! 
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tainted_angel No Longer Living Aug 10 2004, 06:45 AM
RiC3xBoy o0o, thats pretty good, me likes Aug 10 2004, 08:37 AM tootsie_kiddo oooh, i lyk it Aug 10 2004, 10:10 AM eboarder2020 awwwwww...its so sad... Great job on it none the l... Aug 10 2004, 10:49 AM F1R3B4T wh0a... i lyk dat Aug 11 2004, 03:18 AM Devastation so flawless, very neat and to the point, i feel th... Aug 11 2004, 02:04 PM yellowgurl its good =) very meaningful
i especially like
... Jun 11 2005, 11:19 PM yukichan I like it..
Its sad though.. Jun 12 2005, 03:25 AM Spiritual Winged Aura does that means .. she died ?
greeeeeeat job. Jun 12 2005, 03:27 AM
wchoi37 great job! Jun 12 2005, 08:07 AM |
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