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 Jun 5 2005, 05:35 PM
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This poem is another love poem, untitled. Title suggestions would be much appreciated. Not one of my strong poems, just thought I would share though. I kind of wanted to make a new style of poem. Syllables from 9 to 1. Copyright to me: Mari. Lol. He was the one who opened my heart He was the one who broke it too "I love you" I say, my part, His reply, "I not you." Ran fast as I bailed My heart then failed As I heard That word Love |
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Jun 6 2005, 04:18 AM
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"one person, one word"?
eh...pretty bad hmm "4 letters of tragedy"? ehh i am going to stop trying but i love the poem very short and sweet it sounds like it should be a song =) |
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leifiram another Jun 5 2005, 05:35 PM
yukichan i like it..its nice and short..good job! Jun 6 2005, 04:27 AM leifiram Thanks. Jun 6 2005, 05:23 PM def_gn lol! that made me laugh i dunno why...sorry =P... Jun 7 2005, 05:54 PM Heathasm it really started to fall apart towards the end..t... Jun 8 2005, 01:25 PM
leifiram Any suggestions then to fix the end? And thanks fo... Jun 8 2005, 04:36 PM |
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