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 Jun 4 2005, 09:41 PM
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drip-drop, drip-drop,
blood pours, her heart stops . screams shouts cries yells nobody's here, nobody tells . kill cut torture slash life's gone in, just one flash . hurt her beat her brutally stab her hell is close but revenge is sweeter . ---- short , but yeah (: |
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Jun 6 2005, 03:11 AM
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very well written i love these sort of poems my only criticism would be instead of "gotta hurt her and beat her" maybe it should be "gotta hurt her, gotta beat her" hmm what do you think?
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lidoxangie revenge Jun 4 2005, 09:41 PM
anqie heheh, that's evil but good. i like it. Jun 4 2005, 09:43 PM kill me please wow.. hmm is there a name for poems written in tha... Jun 4 2005, 10:37 PM Statistik wow i dont even consider that as a poem Jun 5 2005, 08:32 AM
lidoxangie QUOTE(Jason61992 @ Jun 5 2005, 8:32 AM)wow i ... Jun 5 2005, 06:04 PM def_gn lol nice Jun 5 2005, 02:48 PM x3__iGiVEup QUOTEheheh, that's evil but good. i like it.
... Jun 5 2005, 09:20 PM iNyCxShoRT Oh how sexy. Ahaha, niceeeee. I love the rhythm to... Jun 5 2005, 09:21 PM |
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