Ode to Psychotic Moods, eh, this is kinda old Options

[danishcookiez]

Please comment!



(inspired by the book The Unquiet Mind... it's about bipolar disorder. I made this when I was learning about poetry formatting, and different techniques... It might be a bit confusing)



Brilliantly magnified
*Vividly colored!

I love it when
you take over
me,
your bodily tomb,
awaiting your
intoxicating rush
Seductive my eyes
they stare-->>> x
penetrating into your lust~
ill-defined
all the while
(feeding)

my head
in
total
mania
R u n n i n g

senseless and dizzy

leaving me on ^high
for days
for days
and restless END....
taunting +

the eyelids beckon... threatiningly too close

almost to end the hysteria

[madness]

of control-less thoughts and emotions

ispeaktoofastformyowngood

and other

tokens of forget-me-nots
and you l e a v e
the eyelids close.... NO



CRASH

\\\\\\\\\\
\\\\\\\\\\\




A cold sudden change fills my air


even though you've left, you're still there in low notes
piano keys hit by long, slender white fingers, belongings of a gaunt nothing
that ravage my soul, gnawing the insides
as I lay for hours in my bed, while the sands of the womanly figure
I cannot have, sink to the bottom hollow of Hades' own
for I await that rush but I stay devoid of feelings
and no other solace besides the lingering death
I have tasted at several occasions, haunts the jelly of my putrid eyes
poisoning with time, with a needle that has been infected
diseased by dirty waters of a cholera outbreak that loosens the very life
of me for at least twenty or more times a day while I lie
in a white hospital gown, downtrodden by the medications
my mouth slightly open, in utter lows I heave my frantic-ness
atop my hardened bed that has been patient to a few good disturbed minds
likewise mine, as I crave your attention:


high

[emazing]

Very good poem - I like your choice of words. :) The word effect is so cool.