She ended up dead, =] hahahaha |
 May 11 2005, 09:49 PM
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i see her smile and pass me by
im too shy to say a word, i dont know why i remember a time when she said hi but i was too shy to say a word, i dont know why now she has a boyfriend, they've alredy kissed ive never felt this way before, not like this i just found out her boyfriends name was chris something broke inside of me, but ive never felt like this i heard her say i love you and that their together for life my thoughts began to darken, i took out a knife i heard him say i love you; marry me and be my wife my thoughts began to darken, i was ready to take his life she turned off the lights and went to bed woke up the next morning, chris was dead i grinned then smiled, didnt hear a word she said cuz the next thing you know, she ended up dead =] hahahah kinda not the topic id write BUT O WELL hahaha |
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May 16 2005, 11:08 PM
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the rhythm reminds me of a song by the killers. i don't know which one, but it's really overplayed, if that helps any identification. i might be wrong, but the words fit pretty well to it.
that really doesn't mean anything, good job! |
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dispn0ygonekrazy She ended up dead May 11 2005, 09:49 PM
lidoxangie wow . dark . ahhahh, but good . May 11 2005, 10:01 PM sweet_devil nice...crazy dude though...like the phamtom of the... May 12 2005, 04:49 AM
FoOd QUOTE(sweet_devil @ May 12 2005, 2:49 AM)nice... May 16 2005, 10:46 PM someflipguy Dude I kind of actually liked it, disturbing thoug... May 12 2005, 07:49 AM dispn0ygonekrazy lol thnx i usually dont write these kind of things... May 12 2005, 08:36 AM xMayleex I liked that lol its kinda dark though May 12 2005, 02:59 PM DaToNeViEtBoI916 reminds me of Mr. Poe. May 12 2005, 08:17 PM littlewhite QUOTE(DaToNeViEtBoI916 @ May 12 2005, 8:17 PM... May 16 2005, 10:06 PM x3__iGiVEup wow, crazy. for some reason, i found that poem. .c... May 12 2005, 08:21 PM x LUV x ALWAYS x dark topic. but for some reason i didn't find ... May 13 2005, 05:38 PM dispn0ygonekrazy lol yeah kinda awkward huh May 14 2005, 02:16 AM PreludeTears nice May 14 2005, 02:36 AM sikdragon sore loser eh? May 14 2005, 03:17 AM iixSOOJINx whoah. that's kind of scary. but it's actu... May 15 2005, 04:19 PM DizzyDucky09 thts actually really good
a lil scary...but noneth... May 16 2005, 07:30 PM dispn0ygonekrazy wow it makes me feel good that this actually captu... May 16 2005, 11:11 PM The Corpse Bride That's very, very dark and evil, but I like th... May 17 2005, 12:06 AM toodlepops. Cute, but I don't really get the point. May 17 2005, 01:47 AM gladz612 wow... so she really ended up dead.. sad. May 17 2005, 02:18 AM yukichan i like how some parts rhyme, although some parts o... May 17 2005, 03:01 AM AngelicEyz00 Wow, just um... wow, haha... That's so not rig... May 17 2005, 01:09 PM BakaYaro wow man lol thats pretty good Apr 18 2006, 11:39 PM KissMe2408 The fact that it rhymed kinda added to the eerie p... Apr 21 2006, 04:25 PM |
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