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 Apr 29 2005, 08:08 PM
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two plus two
doesnt always equal four theres more than meets the eye, 5 different types of sighs . one more way to die . drop the knife pull the trigger kiss my lips hold me closer . close my eyes, count to three, four more seconds till i die . walk around me once not twice now once more, make it thrice take your aim make it precise bang bang . my heart stops, the very one you broke . bang bang now i'm dead . you kno what? f**k what they said . yu should have told me you loved me instead. nine more f**king lives to live, one last heart to break . |
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May 1 2005, 02:38 AM
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 I'll never be who I was again.. Group: Member Posts: 2,886 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 77,981 |
wow..that was really good..
nice job.. |
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lidoxangie Pull the trigger Apr 29 2005, 08:08 PM
sadolakced acid very nice. it captures emotion nicely.
good job Apr 29 2005, 10:09 PM sikdragon could've flowed better, seemed choppy. Apr 29 2005, 10:55 PM
lidoxangie QUOTE(sikdragon @ Apr 29 2005, 10:55 PM)could... Apr 30 2005, 01:06 AM sikdragon then why not make it like the sea in the building ... Apr 30 2005, 07:36 AM x3__iGiVEup QUOTE"sea in the building of a storm and go a... Apr 30 2005, 11:14 AM sikdragon the sea gets choppier. Apr 30 2005, 11:22 AM lidoxangie ------ Apr 30 2005, 04:05 PM iNyCxShoRT oh one word: wow Apr 30 2005, 11:36 AM PinkTrash well done, i like it Apr 30 2005, 11:12 PM dELiRiOUS8o8 wow! :].. speachless May 1 2005, 12:53 AM sikdragon I write poems all the time and post them on here a... May 1 2005, 01:50 AM islandgirl4eva The "choppiness" of the poem adds to the... May 1 2005, 10:15 AM |
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