11 Years Old Options

[..:loveee.NuTTii]

It's my first time postin here....I'm nervous.
Anyway, it's this thing I wrote for one of my English homeworks and everyone liked it:

11 years old
Standing by the grave side
Watching everyone cry my flower away
Mines didn't even make it to the bottom
Before they started filling up the grave
I don't really think about it much now
But it still hurts when I see her face
And I was just 11

I went numb for some time
Afraid to heal, trying not to heal
It all just seemed too surreal
She was gone so I started acting dark
I snapped at my friends and cursed them all
One gets pissed, calls me a poser, and breaks away
Now we just don't talk at all
But then I was just 11

What hurt the most was noone told me
Daddy withdrew and mommy cried
And I got all dressed up that day
Trying to impress her
Only she wasn't there to see
Eyes closed, hands clasped
How could she go so peacefully
Knowing she left me behind
Now I'm not 11
And now I finally see

[..:loveee.NuTTii]

In a nutshell for you geniuses, if the poet wanted to write it better for the poem's sake, they needed to take it a bit more in depth. if not fine. It's called constructive criticism. The writer can choose to respond to the criticism or ignore it. you will tread on noone. and for mr.acid, who cares if you're being mean.

Well, I appreciate the critique, but really I'd rather keep the poem the way it is. At first, I did want to change it, but now I don't know. The more times I read it, the more I feel any changes would disrupt how the poem makes me feel. Like the part that I didn't too like "Afraid to heal, trying not to heal/It all just seemed too surreal" It describes it perfectly. I don't think I could go too much more in depth because this happened when I was 7 and I have gotten over it. It does pull at my heart, but just a little now. A little is enough for me. Thanks anyway.