Wandering, spirits, eyes souless and cold |
 Apr 29 2005, 02:55 PM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you!  Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674  |
Wandering
The fog is dense, Gravestones scattered, Old and broken, Chipped and battered, A breeze across my ankles, Sent the lost spirits sad and haunting, Their eyes souless and cold, This life they're always wanting, While melancholy's all they hold, Forever deep within, Where once there was a heart, a soul, Of which they can't retrieve again. I don't think I did a particularly good job on this one, but I decided to put it up anyway. Critique and comments appreciated. |
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Apr 30 2005, 07:28 AM
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 Bardic Nation Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
Apparently you're in no position to judge me. If that's your first impression, take a second look.
Secondly, if that's how it's going to be described, answers need to be presented, or else more questions need to be presented. This is half a fragment if that. |
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Paradox of Life Wandering Apr 29 2005, 02:55 PM
racoons > you its great. it gave me shivers. really excellent in... Apr 29 2005, 04:02 PM sikdragon where's the rest of it? how did they get that... Apr 29 2005, 11:47 PM
Paradox of Life QUOTE(sikdragon @ Apr 29 2005, 10:47 PM)where... May 1 2005, 09:46 AM racoons > you ^
ever heard of subtlety?
your first line and a b... Apr 30 2005, 06:58 AM Rachel is love ^There is no CORRECT way to write poetry. You can ... Apr 30 2005, 10:35 AM x3__iGiVEup i like it =) "A breeze across my ankles,... Apr 30 2005, 11:08 AM sikdragon advice and suggestions are the sole reason anyone ... Apr 30 2005, 11:09 AM islandgirl4eva I really like this piece. Again, you've done e... May 1 2005, 10:12 AM FoOd I like it. It makes me feel like I am in a grave y... May 1 2005, 10:22 AM sikdragon QUOTE^There is no CORRECT way to write poetry. You... May 2 2005, 02:11 AM lidoxangie ------ May 2 2005, 02:18 AM sikdragon she did do a good job.
i advise you to get off y... May 2 2005, 03:00 AM |
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