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Inspiration has hit!, Finallllly.
Rachel
post Apr 20 2005, 10:19 AM
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i've never wanted anything rationale.
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Well I was on the plane to Chicago on Friday, just sitting there and listening to The Used when all of a sudden, I was inspired. To my despair my mom did not have any paper. So what did I write this beauty on? A NAPKIN!!! I felt soo....artsy happy.gif anyways enjoy. There isn't really a structure. I wouldn't really call it a poem. It just, well, came to me. You can comment, critique, cry, laugh...whatever! I just felt like sharing _smile.gif

I still remember the first day we met.
I was the new girl, you were the class clown.
Almost immediately I knew we were going to be friends.
What I did not expect, was love.
True love.
You just stole my heart with your big blue eyes and sweet smile.
Our first date was with your parents.
I came late, you had already paid.
I, of course, forgot my key and had to go home with you.
When my parents finally came an hour later, they hit it off with yours.
I was there for another three hours.
The next day, I was back at your house.
We were on your bed, it was 11:11.
You told me to make a wish.
A few minutes later, you turned to me and suprised me with a kiss.
It was our first and one of many.
Then a few minutes later, your dad walks in!
God that was funny.
We may be young but I know our love is real.
You are my rock and you are my soul.
You have this effect on me, I cannot really put it into words.
You just understand me, you get me and accept me for who I am.
I love you for that.
You truly are amazing.
I cannot stand it when we are apart.
To quote The Used:
"Every second I'm without you
I'm a mess"

I really am.
All that I ask is please, please don't break my heart.
 
 
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Rachel
post Apr 27 2005, 07:11 PM
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i've never wanted anything rationale.
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^Thank you much <3

Love is a super thing haha.
 

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Rachel is love   Inspiration has hit!   Apr 20 2005, 10:19 AM
Teesa   wow rachel, that was beautiful. you wrote it on a ...   Apr 20 2005, 12:01 PM
Rachel is love   whoooops, they HIT it off =) hehe I'll go chan...   Apr 20 2005, 12:04 PM
mzkandi   QUOTE(xxcrazyjewxx @ Apr 20 2005, 11:19 AM)I ...   Apr 20 2005, 12:44 PM
Funky Buddha   Pretty I like it, you too have the ability to wr...   Apr 20 2005, 02:00 PM
Rachel is love   ^haha thanks =) I want to be a journalist/writer ...   Apr 20 2005, 08:08 PM
Nicolatofu   aww Rachel, that's so cute. Just curious, are ...   Apr 20 2005, 08:13 PM
aera   thats really nice. you should show it to him on hi...   Apr 20 2005, 08:52 PM
Rachel is love   Hehe, I am not sure...I don't think he knows t...   Apr 20 2005, 09:05 PM
mzkandi   QUOTE(xxcrazyjewxx @ Apr 20 2005, 10:05 PM)He...   Apr 20 2005, 09:09 PM
Rachel is love   ^Haha, well I said yes but that we were too young....   Apr 20 2005, 09:22 PM
islandgirl4eva   It's so full of emotion and love that you bear...   Apr 20 2005, 10:29 PM
stephinika   ^^ i completely agree with naomi. that was so beau...   Apr 20 2005, 11:52 PM
xXirockhardXx   Very lovely. I like it a lot.   Apr 21 2005, 12:41 AM
M1SSxCHR1SSY   Great job Rachel. I love it. I like how you said t...   Apr 21 2005, 02:15 AM
gladz612   so touched...   Apr 21 2005, 03:24 AM
Rachel is love   Thanks guys =). It was just like a sudden burst of...   Apr 21 2005, 12:18 PM
FoOd   ahhh~ :D that was such a sweet poem. That sounds ...   Apr 21 2005, 05:06 PM
avalon*   That's a gorgeous piece of writing =]   Apr 21 2005, 05:21 PM
xd0rkette   That was amazing. You're such a good writer, R...   Apr 21 2005, 08:04 PM
Rachel is love   ^Me too. If he breaks my heart, I have a bunch of ...   Apr 23 2005, 10:52 AM
IamRad   Thats a beautiful poem. "You told me to make...   Apr 27 2005, 04:38 PM
Rachel is love   ^Thank you much <3 Love is a super thing haha.   Apr 27 2005, 07:11 PM
KissMe2408   my goodness that was lovely =) It was simple, yet ...   Apr 28 2005, 11:59 PM
yukichan   wow..that was good...i really like it..   Apr 29 2005, 02:42 AM
..:loveee.NuTTii   Writing on a napking....that is artsy Your piece...   Apr 29 2005, 07:49 AM
racoons > you   rachel, thats beautiful.... awww... lucky tom. (a...   Apr 29 2005, 12:38 PM
Rachel is love   ^Haha yes James, t'was for Tom =). I still ha...   Apr 30 2005, 10:32 AM
Rachel is love   QUOTE(xxcrazyjewxx @ Apr 20 2005, 8:19 AM)All...   Aug 12 2005, 04:26 PM
jooleeah   ^ Aww. I hope you and him can patch up again. If ...   Aug 12 2005, 04:37 PM


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